
Do we have to use the escalator Mom? Five year old Dan looked up at Sofia, eyes round.
We have been over this a thousand times. Get moving Danny, unless you want to miss the start of the movie.
But Rob said…
He was making it all up to scare you.
What about Mary, Jessica and Simon?
They know how easily provoked you are.
What about that story in the papers Uncle Fred was taking about?
It was an accident baby, don’t be such a sissy now!
I am not a baby, protested Dan.
Then stop behaving like one. Step on it, will you? People are waiting.
Dan finally obeyed, and they were on the way up.
God please protect me and Mom, he kept muttering, eyes closed, clutching onto his mother’s hand so tight that she could hardly feel it.
Sofia smiled in embarrassment at the onlookers chuckling around them.
He’s been paying too much attention to rumors, she murmured to the old lady with the pink hat on the step below.
But how did that child die…
Shhh! She pleaded with a finger on her lips hoping Dan had not heard.
Evil eyes dear, evil eyes. Be careful about your boy, said Pink Hat, clucking.
They had reached the landing above, Dan opened his eyes slowly.
Didn’t I tell you darling? You were scaring yourself for no reason.
Yes Mom, he agreed and turned around just in time to see a slimy green hand withdrawing into the steps.
NOTE : This is my entry for the Ascension Short Fiction Contest. The story has to be of not more than 250 words while using the picture above for inspiration. Do try taking part, the contest is open till the 14th.




















114 Footnotes:
Did i tell you it is so awesome? :P
interesting perspective and so surreal, though you made that fantasy part look rather real.. now am scared of escalators :x
Good work, dear! :)
good girl :P
sami main to ab bore ho chuki hu ye kahate kahate ki tum kinna accha likhti ho. kabhi to aisa likho jisse i get d chance to say kuch aur.. kabhi to mujhe shikayat ka mauka do dadimum:p
here i am not ablt to think anything out of that pin n here u are writting stunning stories.
mere liye to tum already hi winner ho, along with lena.
simply fabulous.
((((((dadimum))))))
lenaaaaaaaa :X:X:X:X
i was suppose to comment 1st.
n sami u dint tell me that u r updating thou i asked u.
vely vely bad. :( :X:X
Lena dear,I think I vaguely remember you telling me that :P
Lol,would love to see you being scared of them :D
Thanks sweetu! :)
Preeti darling,tu sone wali thi na,to I didn't want to stop you.Tujhe neend hi inni mushkil se aata hai :P
Thanks a lot Angel.You are always too generous in your praise :)
Waiting to see your entry.Love you loads.Muaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah
(((Angel)))
very interesting! good work. all the best!!
;-))
Thanks a lot! :)
Nice one mate... keep writing...
n dat was amzin n a real show of talent...!!! im sure dis will fetch ye sumthin...!!! clap clap
n hey..slaaaaaap...4 not visitin me..!!! grrr...n...now im off 4 exams too...
:) hope u r fine...hearin very less from u dese days...
Keep up the good work hun! No wonder ur going places with ur Writing. Ur a genuinely talented writer who writes from her soul, making it very interesting and real for the reader.
Keshi.
hey sami... i don't know of other stories...
this needs a winner's medal! :)
a whole concept in 250 words or less... wow... i don't know if i could, but i will try to do!
slimy green hand? he saw it too... u stopped story at interesting point... want to know more!! the fear of the kid, mom pacifying him... all was beautifully penned.
all the best, hope u win..!
Somtimes its tough to re-start when we've fallen once..but when we get onto the flight of life..it takes up to heaven :)
Goood work,baby! :)
lol :P
You captured simply interesting the moment to imagine! So sweet dear :)
ooo that is scary..nice entry..hope u win!
Sameera, that was one awesome story! I actually want to forget this because I use the escalator way a lot and even Syabil and Daryn love going on the escalator too. Now, thanks to you, I would be imagining the green slimy hand from the steps. LOL
Well done on this short story, can't wait to read more stories, and please don't make a scary story about aeroplanes next. heheheheheh
I loved the colours in the story.. Pink Hat, Green Hands :-) amazing thinking.. Keep it up darl. All the best for the contest too. Love u. Umma
Thank you Arv.
Thanks Nithin! :)
You have not been around Mr,I mean Dr,not the other way around.Will be over to your place soon.I am good,thanks.Good luck for exams!
Thanks a lot Keshi darling! :)
Hey Vinay,thanks a lot buddy!Glad you enjoyed the story.I kind of like it too.Would love to read your take on it :)
Great philosophy Aayushi but what does it have to do with this story? :P
Thanks Babes!
Lol back at you Vishesh! :P
Thanks a lot Jeevan! :)
Thanks a lot Aditya!
Thanks a lot Farah!I can imagine the effect it would have had on you,being a Mom of two little apples :)
Don't worry dear,it's just fiction!Lol,aeroplanes ha?You never know :P
Good one, Sameera...
Liked the message there :)
But in fact, only once when my husband pushed me into it did I use an escalator..and I almost fell..that's when Metro rail was lauched in Delhi...he fooled me saying there was no stair-case there at the most crowded stations...
when we came back, I walked around to find the stair case and to this date i climb all the stairs..even if its from underground to over head. :)
I am an 'back in the olden times' kind :))
wishes,
devika
I know you love the colors the best Jaanu,PKBB!Thanks a lot :)
Love U loads.Ummmmmmmmmmmmmmmaaa
Thanks Devika :)
Lol,happens.Sometimes we just can't get used to some kinds of technology,no matter what!
Right O' Sameera :)
devika
:)
really well written must say...:)
Thanks :)
I hate escalators too. So Dan could have been Little Ropi. :D I have fear of height. It can be funny to others sometimes.
next time i am in a mall, i wud rather take the stairs!
beautifully written! take care :)
m scared of escalators as it is..now m convinced i need to stay AWAY from em.....aaaaaaaaaarghhh!!
piiichh..arey bhaii..Dan was afraid to go up the escalator b'cos he was afraid..but when his mommie reassured him, he reached their safely, and overcame his fear.
Yahi toh story hai naa?? :O
Know what? I was thinking of writing on these lines. Honest. You beat me to it... Aaarrgghhh...
:P
Ah well... Dekho, you win. ok? And we share the spoils of victory. ;)
Hmmm... Mujhe ab kuch aur sochna padega. :(
Jokes aside - Excellent story buddy. Bonne chance!
Peace.
i'm praying my mum doesn't read this! she's paranoid about using escalators!
streak of horror!! i like! i really like! :)
clapsss :)..that was a wonderful rite up sami :)...u will definitely win :)...
but i like the fist comments ...preeti angry :P...heheh
urs..hemu..
slimy green hand in d escelator...reminds me of final destination...gives me d heebie jeebiez!!!
this could have been a stairway to failyland/neverland..
why so scary...gave me creeps..
writing something meaningful in 250 words is tough and you wrote this short story, wow!! nice!!
Lovely lil story! :)
Tell us if you win! :) :)
nice story and neat design! Hope ur in the pink of health! :D
Lekin slimy hands remind me of Shrek..:O..though I found him cute! :D
Wow Ropi!Nice to know about something you are scared of finally :P
Very nice and very interesting :)
Good job!
Sam sam sammy ..u gave me the goosebumpy ..lets see if i can manage to participate
eee.. really good.. short and slimy..
You did a good job showing us how we all need to face our fears. I would've liked to have seen some green slime on the child's shoe earlier on.
Very interesting is your Entry, dear Sameera.
And perfectly written. I enjoyed every word of it.
I wish you the best!
I'm going to buy your book next month.
For sure; I love your writing.
Have a wonderful day!
getting inspired from u and ceedy .. i too have tried to write a short story on this picture ... come chk my blog and let me know your comments :)
He he!Thanks Anil :)
@Trinaa : :P
Thanks Aayushi for having read the story the second time around! :P
Shrek was not slimy girl,I find him cute too :)
You were thinking of writing along the same lines Kartz?Then I sure am glad that I bet you to it :P
Waiting to see your entry :)
Thanks buddy!
Swati,I would love to know what your Mom thinks of it ;)
Thanks dear :)
Thanks a lot Hemanth!Win or not,am glad people liked the story :)
Yup,that was cute :P
Glad that this had such an effect on you Mayz! :P
There are many entries with that theme Bro,you should give them a read :)
Glad I scared you :P
Thanks a lot Shrav!If I do,I surely will :)
Thanks Puresunshine!Yup I am ;)
Thanks Mehreen! :)
Glad I did Farah :P
You must!
Thanks Ishqia :)
Welcome here JR and thanks!As I said before,he would never have ascended had the slime been there in the beginning :P
Thanks a lot Krystyna dear! :)
*HUGS*
I really liked it Hiren,you should submit it! :)
interesting take....fears of an adolescent mind!!!
nice scary view.. there must be a real hand tht pulls ppl in.. i've read tht in the papers.. :P no really..
heyyy.. all the best fr the contest..
thats a great idea Sameera ,
i wish i could write some story ...somehow i did nt get that urge ...but may be someday ...
rest i enjoyed your story ...infact i love to read small stories :)
tc
sayani
fear takes many forms..nice story sameera..
Bone-chilling ! I really hope you win the contest:)
its a different take.. bt nice one.. that story was wonderful.. so v cn expect more such soon??
Sis, you kno I run from my shadow do imagine taking the stairs at the mall from fear of that green hand made of slim?? I'm already scared of elevators! :( lol
You always do a splendid job...
Loved it!
(((SAMMY)))
Excellent dialogue in this short story Sameera. Anna :)
just realized that in the excitement of my story .. i missed out to give you my reaction of your story :) will comment on Jason's blog itself ...
Wow simply superb! I can see it happening that's what i felt wheni was reading.....
Hi Sameera,
The story is very short and a little bit hanging but there's that limitation on the number of words to be used. I hope you win the contest and add another feather to your cap. I pray that you will finally realize your dream of becoming a professional writer. Thanks for the short story. I like it. God bless you always my friend.
Hiyaa Sameera,,
What a story.. loved the way it ended.. that slimy green hand vanishing.. phewwww.. :-)
Happy new year,, girl.. :-)
Woah thats so amazing.. and yeah i used to be scared too.. but now i just make sure i step on the right step..
woah! that was amazing.. gosh u write soo so well!
:-)!u changed ur template.
Thanks Saim!A child rather,he's just 5 :)
Hey Knatch!Where have you been?
Thanks a lot dear :)
Thanks a lot Sayani!You can,just give it a shot.Reading them is the first step to writing one :)
Thanks Lakshmi.
Glad you enjoyed it Yasmeen dear,thanks!With all the wonderful entries there,I don't really hope to win,but will get there someday :)
Thanks Saurabh!As for a new one,keep waiting :)
Ne darling,am not surprised you are scared of them.Glad I scared you some more :P
Love ya Sis!
(((NE)))
Thanks a lot Anna! :)
No issues Hiren,I am glad you are so excited :P
Thanks a lot for the encouraging feedback there :)
Thanks a lot Kitchen Flavours! :)
Glad you liked the story Mel.I intentionally left it on that note,to let the reader imagine as to what is next :)
As for winning the contest,I really do not think so as there are much better entries in there.Thanks for the encouragement my dear friend.God Bless You and your loved ones always.
Thanks a lot Muzer,glad you enjoyed the read :)
Happy New Year to you too dear!
Thanks Harini!I used to be scared too as a child,and always concentrate when getting on one,especially on the way down :)
I do that all the time Utopia :)
It brought back the memoirs of the empire mall incident in Bangalore where a child died falling from the unprotected escalator.
Nicely written.... All the Best.
sorry it was not empire mall.... mall name is something else.... regarding to the earlier comment....
Oh,that's sad...
Thanks!
I was wondering where you were going to take that to! A very unexpected ending!
I just went with the flow :)
these days wen ever i see an escalator, some one in a red skirt with a black [i guess] hand bag whispers from behind "dont be scared" and it wud scare me like hell :P
beautiful [and scary :(] story sami.. did ya send ur votes?? m yet to do tht :( not yet finished readin all stories :(
Lol!I wonder who that someone is :D
Yup I sent them the day the voting started as I had read all the stories as they were being published :)
Btw,the skirt and bag are both brown :P
nice story idea sameeraa!
oops i am late for the contest...very very late
Welcome here and thanks!
There's always a next time :)
nice post considering that u cud use max 250 words..slimy green hand...any sequel coming up?
ive written a few stories too...do have a look wen u find time
Cheers
CRD
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Thanks!Maybe I might write one sometime.Ok will do.
omg congratulations!! the story was super great, was a pleasure to read it!!!!
Thanks a lot dear! :)
wow thats great ...
its so nice that u managed to take a fleeting observed moment on some escalator and turn it into such a nice story, of course u had the pic for inspiration but wonderfully done nonetheless :)
Thanks dear,I just let my imagination carry me away :)
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