It was all over. There was nothing to live for, nothing to hope for anymore. She kept walking aimlessly on the hillside. The stars were shining so brightly but it seemed like doomsday to her. The full moon was menacing, laughing at her pain in all its glory. How cruel could nature get?, she thought.
One could not blame her state of mind. The earthquake had taken away all her family and friends. She had miraculously escaped but it only seemed like a bane to her. She had no means of making it all alone through the tough road that lay ahead and at the risk of being remembered as a coward, had taken this decision.
On second thoughts, who would be there to remember her? Life could be so cynical and harsh. She, who had been the strength and hope for many and had averted hundreds of suicides in her successful counseling career, was on the verge of committing one herself.
There, the cliff was not far now. Very soon she would be with her loved ones and free of this misery. There was a single deciduous tree and beyond that a ledge from where she would descend into the inviting clutches of death. How alone that tree was, just like her. How harsh a season it had withstood and yet it survived. Not a living thing in sight and yet it swayed, full of life. She stopped in her tracks, suddenly ashamed of herself, uncertain...
Note : The above was my entry for the Whispers Short Fiction Contest held in February. The story had to be of two hundred and fifty words based on this picture.
One could not blame her state of mind. The earthquake had taken away all her family and friends. She had miraculously escaped but it only seemed like a bane to her. She had no means of making it all alone through the tough road that lay ahead and at the risk of being remembered as a coward, had taken this decision.
On second thoughts, who would be there to remember her? Life could be so cynical and harsh. She, who had been the strength and hope for many and had averted hundreds of suicides in her successful counseling career, was on the verge of committing one herself.
There, the cliff was not far now. Very soon she would be with her loved ones and free of this misery. There was a single deciduous tree and beyond that a ledge from where she would descend into the inviting clutches of death. How alone that tree was, just like her. How harsh a season it had withstood and yet it survived. Not a living thing in sight and yet it swayed, full of life. She stopped in her tracks, suddenly ashamed of herself, uncertain...
Note : The above was my entry for the Whispers Short Fiction Contest held in February. The story had to be of two hundred and fifty words based on this picture.





















51 Footnotes:
HOney this was beautiful !!
Your ever-fertile mind at its creative best, wow !!
I loved the concluding lines. At times you really dont need to say it all. I personally like stories or write-ups or poetry of this sort...that leave the end to the readers mind.
Didja win this thing ?
Hey sweetie you got logged off kya??
Thanks so much dear!I too kinda liked the ending :)
No Babes,I did not.If you have time,do go through the other entries through the link I have put up.They are too good!I have a long way to go :)
wow..I go through the link you provided and surely have to come back to read more.Awesome short stories!
Imagine with only simple one pic,has produced so many creative ideas from all over.
..and yours
..definitely a gr8 read.Actually I also love such ending..up to us to decide, more satisfaction:)
sweetu, i wondered when you finally will put up this one :)
and the time has come. i loved it then, i love it now even more, beautiful piece of writing and no matter what you say, you dont have a long way to go, you have got the talent and no contests will ever be able to prove it wrong :) :)
i really loved this, it reminded me of my own "cliff feeling" ...
hey very nice attempt..been a long time how have you been..
beautiful writing as usual!
Keshi.
what a poignant piece..I can almost feel what she is feeling right now..
lakshmi
wow! that was too short and yet so full...and the ending was great!
kookie is good but the summer heat makes her panting at noon. but she's all okey and still bonehead at times. see yah!
beautiful story... i like how the simple lines managed to describe everything and you come to know so much about her in just a few lines... and i love the open endedness... :)
Thanks Mann! :)
Thanks Lakshmi!Shows that you are a good reader :)
Thanks Keshi!
Hello Computador,welcome here and thanks.
Yes Noushy!They are awesome indeed :)
Thanks dear,glad you liked it!
Lena sweetu,thanks a lot for your encouraging words.Love you!Hugsss
Thanks Shnaggy!It had to be short according to the rules.
Oooh summer is starting here too.He he "bonehead",so cute!Give my love to her :)
Thanks Vands dear.It reminds me of mine too!TC.Hugsss
Thanks Rambler!I am fine,thanks.How's you? :)
A true justice done to the picture.
A story worth an award.
have a nice time. :)
Hi Sameera,
Lovely! You've got so much of talent and so much to teach me....Hope you do well in the competition....Good luck :p
Tooo good... Hope is the only hope.
Sameera, this was beautiful. Thank you for sharing it. :)
Lovely writeup Sameera.
Thanks Amanda,you are welcome! :)
Thanks Priya!
Welcome here Cm-chap and thanks.
Thanks a lot Meghna.Life is a learning process dear :)
As for the competition,its results came out long back and I did not get a prize.You should check out the amazing stories and winners in the link I have given!
Thanks so much Sunil :)
Ending with uncertainty, you have left the reader wondering! I'm sure she did learn from the example of the tree.
Beautiful piece.
sameera, I know you want to talk to me and i will try tto get on soon when are you usually on? I am not okay everytjhhing is going wrong with me these days i really need some prayers :)
Sweet..
Yea.. Every other thing teaches us something na..!!
Juz Need To Think....
Nice Read..
:)
hey sameera
thanks a lot..
some times i feel they are people to be honored the most am i right
Nice!!
Am in trance,welcome here and thanks!
Kaylee Baby!My prayers are always with you.Everything will be just fine ok.Love you.Hugsss :)
You are welcome Renin Raj!Yup true :)
Thank you so much Celine!
I am sure too that she did so :)
Thanks Rohit!!
I hope you will be successful on the contest
beautiful!
ammu.
wow !!
well written..
keep continue..:)
Again, that was a very beautiful short story. Just like the others you posted before. Keep on making them my friend. God bless you always.
very precise, articulate...and impressive :-)
Thanks Raaji! :)
Thank you very much Mel.Take care my friend.God Bless You always.
Thanks Ammu!
Thanks Huh?Where am I?!
Could you please tell your name so that it would be easy to address you? :)
Thanks Emperor Ropi but it was in February and I did not get any prize,and it's ok :)
Hmmm ...
Great imagination!
Ditto Cinderella ...
I love the concluding lines
GBU
Arti
Thanks a lot!I read your other comment.Thanks for asking.Will let you know.TC.God Bless You too!
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